Thanks for the comments on “Souvenirs”. Re the POV: yes, it will change from chapter to chapter, and mainly it will be the POV of each of the girls as things become more heated. Eg that was why I made one of them Jewish; she thinks she is too enlightened to care about anyone’s race or culture, but when the chips are down, it matters a great deal to her that the man who wants her is a Gentile. (I don’t want to give too much away, but I’m sure you’ve already worked out that the men aren’t Spare Rib subscribers!) That’s another reason why the short story form for this piece just doesn’t work – you can’t get away with the POV shifts, and everything was just too hurried and condensed. “Chapter by chapter” seems tailor-made for it – I can take my time with the details and development. In fact I’ve no choice, because I’ve just started a run of work which is temporarily going to limit my writing time.
This is one of those stories – I think most writers have them – that I keep leaving, then returning to. I work on it for a while, get fed up with it, work on other stuff, and then think up a new angle for it. In fact in future I would like to do a version which starts when the men have just arrived in the town, so we get more of a build-to the confrontation on the beach, and more of a 3-D picture of the men.
Anyway: just thinking out loud here. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff. That Logan isn’t a chap whose pint you’d want to spill in a pub, is he?! But he’s fun to read about.
Atb
Hi John,
Welcome to Authearth. Hoping to see your work on the site - and don't worry about talent. We all have it, we just need the confidence to show it off :)
Rosie
PS: I agree with Sean Connery reading an audiobook - he has an amazing voice.
welcome john...look forward to seeing your work. remember the point is to just throw it out there and let it land where it lands and however it lands :)
Well, there's one way to find out (if you've got the talent) - by posting your work on here! There are lots of readers giving feedback and I'm sure they'd like to see your writing. Good luck and enjoy the site.
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This is one of those stories – I think most writers have them – that I keep leaving, then returning to. I work on it for a while, get fed up with it, work on other stuff, and then think up a new angle for it. In fact in future I would like to do a version which starts when the men have just arrived in the town, so we get more of a build-to the confrontation on the beach, and more of a 3-D picture of the men.
Anyway: just thinking out loud here. Looking forward to reading more of your stuff. That Logan isn’t a chap whose pint you’d want to spill in a pub, is he?! But he’s fun to read about.
Atb
ahhh if only sean hadn't retired. maybe we can get him on here :)
Welcome to Authearth. Hoping to see your work on the site - and don't worry about talent. We all have it, we just need the confidence to show it off :)
Rosie
PS: I agree with Sean Connery reading an audiobook - he has an amazing voice.
Best Thed